This is just to Slay – Poem – Parity of This is just to say by William Carlos Williams – NaPoWriMo Day 21

On another blog, a friend of mine has been doing 30 poetry reading in 30 days during National Poetry Month. He recently read a “parity” of a poem (here) and so I thought I would try my own parity of the same poem. In David’s blog he mentioned that he (like me) grew up listening to Weird Al Yankovic. One of the things that I always appreciated about Weird Al’s parodies is that he was able to get really close to the original sound and rhythm of the original song. “Just beat it” became “Just eat it” or the more recent example “trying to catch me ridin dirty” became “They think I’m white and nerdy.” So I too have attempted to stay as close to the original poem in sound etc.

The original poem is here and my parity is below:

This is just to say
By: William Carlos Williams

I have eaten
The plums
That were in
The icebox

And which
You were probably
For Breakfast

Forgive me
They were delicious
So sweet
And so cold

My parity:
This is just to Slay (Cat to owner version J )

I have eaten
The Yums
That were in
The unlocked box

As such
You were probably
Them breakfast

Forgive me
They were delicious
So sweet
And so bold

Stephen Kellogg – 2012

In this case “’Yums” for Plums = Yummies to the cat… or birds

About Stephen Kellogg

Poetry, Ponderings, Prose, Photos & Pounding out the Pathways All at my blog... I hope you'll take a few minutes to wander around the site. Not all of what you read there will be happy or sad etc. but I trust my writings, photos etc will encourage, touch, inspire or just make you think…. I really appreciate feedback!! Thanks and enjoy Peace! Stephen Kellogg All of my writings, pictures etc are original works, unless otherwise noted, and should be considered copyrighted.
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6 Responses to This is just to Slay – Poem – Parity of This is just to say by William Carlos Williams – NaPoWriMo Day 21

  1. sonofwalt says:

    hee hee… I giggled out loud. Glad I brought Kenneth Koch to your attention. He seems to have inspired you. Or was it just Al? 😀
    Nice work, sir.

    • David,
      It was a mix of all three. The thing about Koch’s version was that it was “a variation” and to me didn’t have the Al “spin” to it. So, I of course took that as a writing challenge. 🙂 I think it turned out pretty well. Thanks for the feedback glad you got a laugh.



  2. hakunamatata23!!! says:

    another one added to my assignments… i might never get this finished heheh 😉

    • Deborah,
      Thanks! Glad you found your way back to my comment section 🙂 I appreciate the feedback…
      Reading = Good
      Clicking like or rating = Better (assuming that you’ve read it first 🙂 )
      Leaving comment = Best

      Thanks again!


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