Stay fast, and do not sway – Double Triolet with a final couplet in refrain


I really had fun with my last “mirror” or “response” poem (Left Exiled and Drifting for Love) to K. McGee poem Self Exiled and Fishing for Love and it was well received so I decided to try again with her other “Double Triolet with a final couplet in refrain” Brave Forth, I will not stray I hope you enjoy. I think it best to read hers first and then read mine.
Thoughts on this type of collaboration (poem by one writer and then response in the same form by another)? Was it enjoyable? Did they stand on their own? Was the combination an enhancement or detraction from the overall experience?

 

Stay fast, and do not sway

Stay fast my love out of this cold
Inside those walls and do not stray
For hearts are won by women I’m told
Stay fast my love out of this cold
A chime will come when clocks grow bold
Our forlorn fears will try to sway
Stay fast my love out of this cold
Inside those walls and do not stray

If my steeled heart perchance be stole
By misfortunes of the day
The kingdom’s streets are lined I’m told
If my steeled heart perchance be stole
Your place for me you mustn’t hold
My faith the same your heart the way
If my steeled heart perchance be stole
By misfortunes of the day

Stay fast my love out of this cold
Inside those walls and do not stray

Stephen Kellogg – 2012

 

Thanks again K. for the inspiration

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About Stephen Kellogg

Poetry, Ponderings, Prose, Photos & Pounding out the Pathways All at my blog... I hope you'll take a few minutes to wander around the site. Not all of what you read there will be happy or sad etc. but I trust my writings, photos etc will encourage, touch, inspire or just make you think…. I really appreciate feedback!! Thanks and enjoy Peace! Stephen Kellogg All of my writings, pictures etc are original works, unless otherwise noted, and should be considered copyrighted.
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