If this were a response to your love poem – poem inspired by a poem


This is a response poem inspired by the poem “if this were a love poem” written by Susan L Daniels and found on her wonderful blog here.

If this were a response to your love poem

I might say once I cried a thousand tears
you saw them as stars
they really were fears
of all that was blooming
if this were a response to your love poem
which it isn’t
so I won’t

I could mention you called my name
held it as a banner
a sweet refrain
as I listened in shame
if this were a response to your love poem
which it isn’t
so I won’t

I could tell how the sound of you
sparked hope and fear
as I sat silenced here
your voice fading away
if this were a response to your love poem
which it isn’t
so I won’t

this can’t be a response poem
about a feeling shared
but never dared
and so it’s not

 

Stephen Kellogg – 2012

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About Stephen Kellogg

Poetry, Ponderings, Prose, Photos & Pounding out the Pathways All at my blog... I hope you'll take a few minutes to wander around the site. Not all of what you read there will be happy or sad etc. but I trust my writings, photos etc will encourage, touch, inspire or just make you think…. I really appreciate feedback!! Thanks and enjoy Peace! Stephen Kellogg All of my writings, pictures etc are original works, unless otherwise noted, and should be considered copyrighted.
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35 Responses to If this were a response to your love poem – poem inspired by a poem

  1. This is absolutely STUNNING!

  2. Reblogged this on Susan Daniels Poetry and commented:
    WOW. I was going to change mine, but Stephen Kellogg wrote this, so I won’t. GORGEOUS.

  3. Saw this via Susan’s site thoroughly enjoyed – thank you!

  4. Bruce Ruston says:

    Very nice Stephen

  5. Came here on Susan’s recommendation – glad I did. Really nice poem.

  6. just lovely – this response in denial speaks to the heart of a love that breathes!

  7. cup112278 says:

    Stephen- your poetry is amazing. I will be honored any advice that you have for me!

    • Kimberly,
      Thanks for the feedback it’s much appreciated. If you want some feedback / advice on poetry, you are welcome to send me a poem or link to a poem you’ve written and I’ll be happy to give you my comments / opinions / suggestions either in the comments or via e-mail.

      Peace,

      Stephen

  8. unfetteredbs says:

    wow is right. fabulous. (Susan is great, isn’t she?)

  9. ruleofstupid says:

    #3b #12r (ask Susan 😉 )

    • Ha… I actually have been reading Susan’s blog just long enough and apparently at the right time to remember when that “system” got implemented… I do need a bit of clarification though… Am I right that if #12r is used and a person is named that means it’s their turn to write one based on the prompt 😉

      • Well didn’t I just get carried away… I saw your comment pop up and thought it was in relation to the comment I had left on your haiku… so Susan, if you’re reading, that’s the prompt I had in mind. as my thought on the rule wouldn’t apply because you wrote the original… 🙂

      • ruleofstupid says:

        Wow – if you’ve found a pattern in these numbers you ARE the Rainman!! 😆

  10. sonofwalt says:

    I love when Stephen gets to responding to poems with poems! Delightful.

  11. Scrolling back through Susan’s and ran across this. Very nice voice.
    Alice

    • Alice,
      Glad you stopped in… and Thanks! Susan’s poem was fun to write against.

      Hope you have some time to wander around the place a bit, leaving footprints as you go…

      Peace,

      Stephen

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